A song for my daughter (need help)

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SoldierDad
SoldierDad Posts: 1,602
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So anyone who knows me know that my world begins and ends with my kids (Christian and Emma). I don't date, don't hardly go anywhere without them. They are my life. Well this Saturday my little princess turns 2. Now I have already bought tons of gifts and we are having a big party (still hoping her mom flies down for the party or at least calls her on her birthday), but I want to do something special. So I thought I would pull out my guitar (it's law that all cowboys be able to play the guitar) and sing her a special song. I am not a writer! Not even close. But I took the song "Crazy Girl" by Eli Young and rewrote it. It feels clunky but I know I can smooth it some as I sing it. Can anyone help with a re-write? I appreciate any and all help!
Thanks and blessings,
Ed

Baby why you wanna cry?
You really oughta know that
We all make mistakes sometimes
Daddies gonna do what daddies do
Gonna give you a hug or two
But I ain’t ever changin’ my mind

Sweet girl, don’t you know that daddy loves you?
Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
Silly Princess come here, let me hold you
Have I told you lately?
I love you like crazy, Emma girl

Wouldn’t miss a single day
I’d probably just fade away
Without you and bubba, I’d lose my mind
Before you and Christian came along
I was livin’ life all wrong
Smartest thing I ever did was be your daddy

Sweet girl, don’t you know daddy loves you?
Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
Silly princess, come here, let me hold you
Have I told you lately?
I love you like crazy, Emma girl

Sweet girl, don’t you know that daddy loves you?
Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
Silly Princess come here, let me hold you
Have I told you lately?
I love you, Daddy loves you

Sweet girl, don’t you know that daddy loves you?
Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
Silly Princess come here, let me hold you
Have I told you lately?
I love you like crazy, Emma girl

Like crazy
Sweet girl
Like crazy
Sweet girl
Like crazy

My Emma girl

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  • piezoeyjune
    piezoeyjune Posts: 186 Member
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    Damn, thats sweet. I think it sounds great but I have zero musical talent so Im probably not a good judge.
    (I can karaoke "Paradise by the Dashboard Lights" awesomely tho...) ::)

    My dad was the hands off kind of guy so its cool to see that kind of adoration.

    Enjoy the birthday. They grow up too fast...

    Bye
  • JulieSD
    JulieSD Posts: 567
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    That is a very sweet song. I got a bit teary eyed.
  • Expatgirl
    Expatgirl Posts: 33 Member
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    What's to change? It is beautiful!
  • BeautyFromPain
    BeautyFromPain Posts: 4,952 Member
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    thats so sweet
    if only my dad actually cared bout me nuff to do something like that for me
  • coloradocami
    coloradocami Posts: 368 Member
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    It's very sweet Ed...she's a lucky little girl to have such a loving daddy!
  • hm_day
    hm_day Posts: 857 Member
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    Awww :) I wish my daddy had been like you when I was growing up. He only became a sap when I got older, lol. Unfortunately, when he first switched over, I didn't appreciate it. We have our differences and we fight a lot. It's so sweet to see a dad who loves his kids so much.
  • peanut613
    peanut613 Posts: 438 Member
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    that's the sweetest thing! I have a 2 year old princess and she is my entire world. what a great gift for her!
  • HeelsAndBoxingGloves
    HeelsAndBoxingGloves Posts: 916 Member
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    Oh my gosh!!! You are the best dad a girl could ask for!! The song is so sweet and perfect :-)
  • Amyding115
    Amyding115 Posts: 120
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    I love that song and that is so sweet! It's perfect because you did it for her from your heart.
  • SmartFunGorgeous
    SmartFunGorgeous Posts: 699 Member
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    Sweet girl, don’t you know that daddy loves you?
    Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
    Silly Princess come here, let me hold you
    Have I told you lately?
    I love you like crazy, Emma girl

    There are only two changes I can see/hear that would smooth it out.
    1. First line of chorus, omit the word "that."
    2. Instead of putting Emma's name at the end (where it's going to be hard to make the music smooth), why not put her name at the beginning? "Sweet Emma, don't you know daddy loves you?" and then remove her name from last line.
  • TC4IOWASTATE
    TC4IOWASTATE Posts: 64 Member
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    That is a pretty special song! Wishing my kids dad would have adored them like you. It will be perfect if you don't find help.
  • ivansmomma
    ivansmomma Posts: 500
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    Not knowing the tune to the song, it would be hard for me to help you with anything. I do love the words, and whatever you sing will be very special for her.
  • bdurls
    bdurls Posts: 128 Member
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    What an amazing gift to give her! You are a wonderful dad! I have a son turning 2 in a few weeks. Such a great age eh!
  • SoldierDad
    SoldierDad Posts: 1,602
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    Sweet girl, don’t you know that daddy loves you?
    Daddy wouldn’t dream of goin’ nowhere
    Silly Princess come here, let me hold you
    Have I told you lately?
    I love you like crazy, Emma girl

    There are only two changes I can see/hear that would smooth it out.
    1. First line of chorus, omit the word "that."
    2. Instead of putting Emma's name at the end (where it's going to be hard to make the music smooth), why not put her name at the beginning? "Sweet Emma, don't you know daddy loves you?" and then remove her name from last line.

    Awesome idea baby! Thanks everyone for there help!
  • sherrillg
    sherrillg Posts: 322 Member
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    Ed it is so wonderful that you recognize how scary life may be for little Emma and your song tells her the very most important thing she and Christian need to know...that YOU will ALWAYS be there! Not going anywhere! Love you to pieces, cowboy!! I don't think you need to change a thing. And make sure you print it out and put it in her "save" box for when she is older. Maybe even make a CD of it for her. She will treasure it forever! (sniff - going to find a kleenex now)
  • EPICSRT
    EPICSRT Posts: 222 Member
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    Your doing good! That right there is down right special! I wish I could do something like that for my daughter (3 years old now).

    Wish I could help you out with it, but about all I do is listen to music; not good with the writing aspect.

    For my daughter it's "I Hope You Dance" by Lee Ann Womack.

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