Speaking in haiku

frankwbrown
frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
in Fun and Games
Do you like haiku?

Are you familiar with haiku poetry?
It's a form of Japanese poetry with a very specific form:
1. consists of three lines.
2. the first line has five syllables
3. the second line has seven syllables
4. the last line, again, has five syllables.
5. the topic can be anything.
6. it needn't rhyme.

That's it.

The game here is to write haiku. It needn't be original, but if not original, please credit the composer.
In fact, if you're aware of haiku's that you think are particularly pleasing in some way, please post!



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  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    edited September 2021
    first draft:
    the gentle blossoms
    sway on branches in the breeze
    the tree is happy.

    revision:
    gentle blossoms sway
    on soft branches in the breeze
    the tree is happy.

    latest revision:

    gentle pink blossoms
    sway on branches in the breeze
    the tree is happy.

    (I decided I liked the original over the first revision, but then added color to bring to mind Japanese Cherry. Still not sure it's better than the original. What do you think?)

  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    sea turtles smiling
    they swim together all day
    water is their life
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    Here is a slightly pessimistic one inspired by a Grook by Piet Hein (If you're not familiar with Grooks, look them up). 😃
    Piet Hein's funny and satirical Grook (not haiku):

    The universe may
    be as great as they say
    but it wouldn't be missed
    if it didn't exist.

    My morbid haiku variation:

    The universe may
    be as great as some have said
    but not if I'm dead.

    😂

  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    My impromptu haiku that inspired me to start this discussion:

    a haiku question:
    care for a cup of coffee
    on this fine morning?

    (I don't imagine this discussion will be one of the hot ones under recent discussions!
    But hopefully, I won't be the only poster?) 😂
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    the sky is bright blue
    filled with white billowy clouds
    I have to look up.
  • futuresylph
    futuresylph Posts: 2,178 Member
    Giant coffee cup
    Filled to brim day after day
    Well worth a haiku.
  • futuresylph
    futuresylph Posts: 2,178 Member
    My favorite Grook is called "Lilac Time:" (I'm not sure about the punctuation; I memorized this delightful poem several decades ago.)

    The lilacs are flowering
    Sweet and sublime
    With a perfume that goes to the head,

    And lovers meander
    In prose and in rhyme
    Trying to say -- for the thousandth time --
    What's easier done than said.

  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    Good haiku...

    Piet Hein wrote some wonderful Grooks, didn't he?

    I have a few favorites too, including this one that's especially apropos on MFP:

    Of drink and victuals and suchlike stuff
    A bit too little is just enough.

  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    I hike each morning
    sometimes I think it is hard
    but worth the effort
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    Sleep like a baby.
    That's what I want to do now,
    But I'm wide awake.
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    my haiku for the day:

    Haiku by Piet Hein
    So curious a wonder
    it would make you smile.
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    edited November 2021
    This coffee tastes good.
    Not as good as chocolate,
    but really, what is?
  • Cat0703a
    Cat0703a Posts: 17,416 Member
    I’m not creative
    Especially this early
    Now where’s the coffee

    Haiku writing hard
    My skills have rusted greatly
    In past thirty years
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    edited November 2021
    ponder this, won't you?
    where do birds go when the wind
    ruffles their feathers?
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    Do birds like coffee?
    I can't imagine they do,
    they don't need caffeine.
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    Have you tried for yoga?
    your body will flex in ways
    you can't imagine.
  • nossmf
    nossmf Posts: 8,903 Member
    A day spent idle:
    Wasted opportunity,
    Or a chance to breathe?

    Some will yell, "Do more!
    Tomorrow's not guaranteed!
    Waste not the present!"

    The reply comes calmly,
    "Take time to stop, smell a rose,
    Excuse me while I nap."

    If either viewpoint
    Is taken to the extreme,
    Regret may follow.

    So heed my advice:
    Work hard but also relax!
    Balance is the key.
  • frankwbrown
    frankwbrown Posts: 12,146 Member
    edited November 2021
    That is a long one.
    It's quite good. Did you write that?
    If so, I'm impressed.
  • nossmf
    nossmf Posts: 8,903 Member
    The work was my own,
    I guess I was inspired.
    I'm glad it made you smile.
  • nossmf
    nossmf Posts: 8,903 Member
    "The small, quick brown fox
    Jumped over the lazy dog..."
    Try typing that fast!

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